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Tuesday, August 9, 2011

Magpie Tales - Soul Sharing

Image Courtesy of Tess @ Magpie Tales


It was a funny old house to begin with, out on it's own, no proper roads for miles around.  It stood bright at night, like Las Vegas in the middle of a desert.  On the porch late evenings, we talked, him more than I.  I was the listener, always was.

Most of the good bits about the house are gone now.  Haunting memories are all that remain.  He too left, not long after that last night.  I don't know why I choose to come back.  What I thought I'd find.

The front door on the porch is broken, hangs off the hinges along with the glass cracked windows and paint curling up like apple peel.  I rub my hands along where once we sat.  The wood course, dry, life sucked away by long hours of sunlight and abandoned nights. 

Once I loved to listen to the night sounds, a backdrop to his mellow words as I'd glide through it all, his tone changing with the lateness of the hour, or if he felt my father was nearby.  Whispers which caressed my neck as he leaned in closer.  I loved him.  I know that now.  

That last night before he went, I knew he wanted more from me.  More of my soul.  The part of me, I wasn't ready to share.  


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40 comments:

  1. wow, I just love how you got the story from that picture. It is fanatic to see how differently people can interrupt pictures.

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  2. Lovely wistful piece. What might have been?
    I love your new blog look and congratulations on all your nominations and awards.

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  3. Thanks Brigid, love lost, a subject matter lasting centuries!

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  4. Memories of past loves can arouse a lot of questions. I especially like:

    "The front door on the porch is broken, hangs off the hinges along with the glass cracked windows and paint curling up like apple peel."

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  5. Yeap Laurie, that is one of my favourite lines too!

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  6. Oh, but it's so painful when one wants so much, and the other is holding back. Tess's painting illustrates this post beautifully.

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  7. Yes Snowbrush - I think Tess's image has resulted in some wonderful responses this week.

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  8. "paint curling up like apple peel..." I love that image. You caught the mood just right with this one. Visits to the past can be painful.

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  9. They can certainly create some soul searching Lolamouse!

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  10. Most missed the body language here. You got it all. A very insightful interpretation-
    He wanted more, and it wasn't just her soul...
    But he still wasn't sure he wanted to commit and she knew it. It was already over.

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  11. Thanks Stafford - the games we people play!

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  12. Whispers caressed my neck. *goosebumps over here!

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  13. Ah you're just an old romantic Kat!

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  14. This is lovely..poignant..I could see evey detail clearly....Paint curling up like apple peel...wonderful!

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  15. Sometimes we aren't on the same wavelength after all.

    Wistful piece that I enjoyed very much.

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  16. "as i glide through it all" i liked this line, subtly spaced and very necessary. seems like you knew he was a "fake" not for you, but loved him at the same time.

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  17. I rub my hands along where once we sat.

    Exactly! Nice :)

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  18. Lost love can be very painful...
    This has such a poetic feel about it...
    Great writing!

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  19. Thanks riggerscam - perhaps she did know him to be a fake or perhaps not! Thanks Jessica & The Cello Strings.

    Erratic Thoughts, such a great name, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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  20. So much better than my offering! Well done.

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  21. Thanks Trellissimo, but I doubt that - will check your post out later once I get a bit of work out of the way!X

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  22. Well crafted pangs of regret. Your technique well worth careful study.

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  23. Thanks Doc - your positive comment is very much appreciated!

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  24. Romantic and bittersweet. Wonderful write, 120.

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  25. Your writing grabbed me and pulled me into a story I wanted to hear more of...excellent writing.

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  26. Thanks Anna, Donna B & Mama Zen!

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  27. Very imaginative. I appreciated the cleverly and sparingly chosen detail which gives it such authenticity.

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  28. Thanks Dave - really appreciated!

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  29. Sensory-/mood-effective 'that was then. . . now' work.

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  30. As I read your Magpie I wondered how it could be you knew so much about me ... and realized so many of us have experienced what you wrote of so beautifully.

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  31. You captured this moment so well. Beautifully written. Thank you.

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  32. Thanks Steve, Tumblewords,Helen & ds - very much appreciated. X And yes Helen, the universal human condition affects us all.

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