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Monday, March 14, 2011

The Strand - Jingle Poetry

The next poem is an adaptation of an older one in response to this week's Jingle Poetry prompt, visit HERE for other contributors.







The Strand

I am three years old,
we walk along the strand, mother and I.
The tide’s coming in,
new smells in an unknown place,
the breeze battering my ears,
filling my hair with knots and sand.

Against the sea and sky he stands, my Dad,
trousers legs rolled up,
white chalk skin, unforeseen,
sober now all pubs are closed.
There are others too,
faces hidden that laugh,
knowing things I cannot know.

He turns to the sea,
his back to me.
I am three years old, cold.
The wind howls.
He walks further out,
the water eating  his feet.
Her hands grip mine,
I scream.

The strand is huge,
I hate it.
Swallowing  my sobs.
‘Shush,’ she says as my father turns,
out from the ocean,
back into childhood memory.

6 comments:

  1. superb delivery, honest and lovely sentiments,
    well done.

    A++

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  2. so sad.. nice.. here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/04/27/cheesecake/

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  3. very powerful delivery,

    sad indeed.
    bless you.

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  4. sad ....yet you have said it wonderfully....

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  5. Oh my gosh.. the pain and sadness seen thru' a child's eyes feel even worse!
    So beautifully written, Louise.. very moving..
    Disturbed parents can have such a horrid effect on little kids

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  6. Thank guys, and yes you are right Kavita, pain and sadness through a child's eyes are the worst.

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